Revisiting

At this point of my research process, I mainly focus on the final revision of my research paper. This week I spent most of my time to share my research paper to my friends and roommates. The audience I set for my topic is general college students or instructors, so I want to know whether my paper is engaging to my audience or not. Most of my friends said it is fine, and they found it understandable, but one of my roommate suggest me to more clear define autism in the first place, then brings it into the media. The reason he wants me to do that because he confused the definition of autism from film as the real definition. So I address more clearly on the first paragraph of the body. Then I start to revise that did my research essay reach my purpose of this research. The main purpose is to convince people to pay attention to stereotype of autism, and to improve autistic people’s living environment. So during the process of the revision, I look for the reasons. By showing the differences between the British girl, Julia, and Indian boy, Tito, I show the consequences of people’s ignorant toward autism stereotype. In addition, I also used the the consequences of difficulty diagnosing autism to support that the myth of autism is preventing autistic people from getting treatments. That causes most of the autistic people or family members to worry. I used these serious outcomes of the stereotypes of autism to bring my audience’s consciousness   back. So I think I did achieve the goal to engage my audience to care about autism. The another reason I share my paper with others is my lousiness in language. I am not good at using rhetoric in my paper, so I want my friends help me to improve some of the words, grammar mistakes, or even sentence structures as long as my style is still in there.

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More researches

After viewing the comments I got and more discussions about  my first draft, I realize some mistakes I have made. For many part of my research essay, I made conclusion out of sense instead of actual evidences. Because I did so much researches on my topic, my opinions of autism changed. I started at being ignorant toward it, but as research more about it, I am more aware of autism. This can be a good thing, but it can be a bad thing as well. The good part is that I know my topic, so I will know how to introduce to my audience, and I know convince them. But the disadvantage is I start to assume that my audience s are as aware of this topic as I do. So in many of my statements, I left many of them unexplained, or unproven. This is a huge drawback to prevent my essay of being a appropriate piece.

I went back to writing center to get more advises, and at some points, they agree with my instructor, and the tutors even help me to decide where I can add more evidences, and where I need more explanations. So I did more researches on statistic evidence to back my statements up because most of my evidence are  individual case examples.  Statistical evidences not only support my essay, they also provide general information of my statement. I went to UB library database to look for statistics for mental illness in general, then I search on autism. So, I can have a broad view of how many percents of people are suffering from mental illness, then as I focus more on autism, the data will be significantly big though the comparison. Not only I have searched on the statistics, I also searched on some theoretical statements from creditable scientists to even more strengthen my statements. From this process of improving my essay, I realize that, the case studies can provide rich evidence for specific condition, but it is hard to provides to general population. So if I want to conclude a more general statement, I need to have general statements from professionals and statistics from large samples.

Structures and Counter Arguments

This week I worked on the structures and counter arguments of my paper after submitting the first draft. In my paper, after introducing what are some common stereotypes of autism, I started to talk about the consequences. But in my first draft, my structures of that part is messy. In peer review, I got the chance to see Olivia’s paper. Her essay is clear and engaging, and every paragraph connects to each other finely. One thing I noticed on her paper is that she also include some good side of the story as counter arguments. She also gave me some advises on the transition between paragraphs. In addition, I found her paper has lots of counter examples to approve her arguments; one thing I noticed on her paper is that she also include some good side of the story as counter arguments. So I have some conclusions about my paper: more counter arguments are needed; connection and the flow between paragraphs need to be improved. So, I started to fix every topic sentence and concluding sentence to transit one argument to another. Then, I went to writing center on Thursday to search more advises. The tutor, Linsey, showed me where to add some more counter arguments and what ideas should be combined and separate more clearly. I put the difficulty of diagnosing autism as one paragraph. Then, the struggle between families as another. I used Tito as a big counter example to show environment and relationships between people can influence the behavior autistic people. The peer review really give me a opportunity to see others’ advantages on their papers. By comparing to my group member’s paper, I started to realize what I can do to advance my own paper. Furthermore, the writing center provides a lot of help on clearing my structures, and strengthen my arguments.

Reconstruction

This week I spent most of my constructing the structure of research paper since the first draft was due. Even though I had the outline already, but when started my first draft, I noticed many weakness in my previous outline, and I found it does not quite tell what I want to state in my research. So I decided to reconstruct it. 

Topic: Stereotypes of autism: svantism and disability of communicating with people.

  • Introduction: introduce the topic by using comparison of people in well. 
  • Autism is presented in media mostly by savant autistic:  
  1. Using comparison of Rain Man and Snow Cake to see the difference in people’s perception over time.
  2. The novel The Curious Incident of the Dog in the Night Time is introduced to furthermore explain how media presents autism. 
  • Explain our perception of savant autistic is wrong from scientific approach. 
  • Consequences of the misconception:
  1. Using the video, “I Hate My Autistic Daughter” to illustrate bad example of dealing with autistic family members
  2. . Explaining people’s attitude toward autistic people changed because of the general categorization of autism in society. 
  3. Diagnosing autism became even more difficult because of these categorization.
  • The situation can be different if autistic patients are surround in good environment.
  • Introducing Tito’s example to prove that autistic people can also function well if they are educated and mentored well by people.

From my personal opinion, I think my second outline is much better. It talks more about the consequences of stereotypes autism, and it will convince my audience to interest in my research and that the part of engaging with my audience. In addition, it offers my paper a more clear purpose. So it will not just be a paper talks about a lot of facts of autism, but also argues why should my audience care my topic. In addition, besides adding consequences to my research, I skipped the step of defining two major autism. I did that because when I look closer to the article “Savant Syndrome 2013-Myth and Realities”, I see many other stereotypes. So I don’t want my audience think I just focused on two. So I decided to introduce these stereotype directly from the media I used. That way it is straight forward to my audience what are some misconceptions of autism. 

 

 

 

 

DIY: Floral Headband 3 Ways

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Now that spring is here it’s time to pack up those winter hats, and let our hair down. Dress up your hair with these quick and easy headband DIYs featuring our favorite spring trend: Florals!

Materials for Flower Headband

What You’ll Need:

Mauve 1 3/4″ Artificial Flowers

E6000

Three Metal Headbands

Scissors

Measuring Floral Trim

1. Place the end of your floral trim against the end of the headband, and line the trim along the headband.

Cutting Floral Trim

2. Cut the trim around the metal headband.

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3. Glue the trim onto the headband, and let it dry.

This DIY is so easy that we had to try it out with other floral trims!

Blue Floral Headband

This variation is made with Navy Floral Rosette Trim. We trimmed back the mesh on the sides after the trim was glued to the metal band.

Sequin Flower Headband

Our last variation used 5/8″ Sequin Flower by the Yard in Soft Multi. It’s the perfect pastel headband…

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Silly Prank DIY Roundup

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Tomorrow is April 1st, which means you only have one day to prepare the perfect pranks to play on your friends and family. If you want to get some silly inspiration to send yourself and your friends into a fit of giggles, check out some of the DIYs below. Some are perfect for April Fool’s, and others are great for a home that loves a little laughter.

Whatever Clock from Serendipity and SpiceWe’ve seen similar clocks all over the internet, and now we know how to make this unaffected “Whatever” clock.

Shark Purse from A Beautiful MessThis Shark Bag is a little bit creepy, and a little bit cute. Despite his sharp fangs, this bag won’t bite and is great for storing lightweight knick-knacks!

Dinosaur Heels from InstructablesThese Dinosaur Heels are too funny! These shoes are definitely business in the front, and Jurassic Park in the back.

DIY Monster PatchesPatch up worn jeans, and give them new life with these monster patches!

Glue Milk Prank

And then…

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